Soyala Amaya

Um...I'm sorry, but I don't think this was a poem. I think these were a couple of sentences. Know the difference? Sentences tell, poems let you feel the end result. ...

Nice hook. Very nice. Writing is almost like fishing, you must first hook the reader, then painfully draw them in to the deeper meaning of your piece so that the ...

All right, first off...ouch incandensence...just...ouch. It wasn't that bad. Admittedly, she did hae a few cliches, and the end did kind of take away the mystique, but she ruined the ...

I...I LIKE this...and it RHYMES! It's...it's a miracle! Ok, to be more serious, this was enjoyable. Very Highwaymanish, if not near as long or...sensational. I'm sorry, but the Highwayman is ...

*yawns and rolls over onto her back with a kitty like mrow* Ok...go with the flow, ride with the tide, the rhyming seems forced when you you force the rest ...

Mmm...hmmm...not your best, but...with a few word changes, could be cured of the numbness. I think thats what happened, you were so angry at your mother that your words were ...

*blink blink blink* Is it my turn to now gape in awe and bow at your feet? this was...is...wow. It deserves a word all its own, but I'm in a ...

I know I've commented on this the first time I saw it, but I have to again...*shudder* I want a guitar player now...just...want...purr....goo...melt...I love the way your words flow, the ...

All right, all right, for my first critique...you shall be my victim! Actually, I like it, which is odd. I usually start off with I ejoyed this but this could ...